
The lassitude at the journey’s end
More tired now than before we left
Over there thoughts tend towards
The infinite, the eternal, the ineffable,
The sky and sleep, the deep and dreams,
Although we observe fleeting impressions
We cannot see things in their totality
We hear but we cannot comprehend
Once I was briefly mistaken for a native
But I am a true citizen of Nowhere
Resident only of wholly imaginary cities
Shimmered reflections in the mirror
Of the lake surrounded by mountains
An agent dealing in unreal estates,
The pregnant stillness before the flash,
The languid ease of definite uncertainty,
Hovering between three distinct stages
That could in the commotion and confusion
Of false memories and vanishing places
Merge and flow together inseparable.
Everybody loves the limpid sunlight
Causing the motes and angels to dance
But close the blinds, shut out beyond
And in the gloom come over to me,
Maybe we can step into that river again?
I like the imagery in this piece – particularly the seemingly contradictory phrases. Technically the alliteration you have used adds to the flow really well – but none of this should detract from how relatable (and enjoyable to read) this is.
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Thank you Chris… I am addicted to paradox and puns, not sure if that is a good or bad thing. Glad you enjoyed!
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I’d go good!
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Apparently some people find paradoxes and punning wearisome. Who are these people?
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Ah, you can never step in the same river twice. This has ease and peace with an undercurrent of uncertainty along with resignation. Love the imagery especially of the angels in the motes. Very dreamy
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Thank you… I am obviously going to have vary my sources. This is a quieter poem than usual, but hopefully not a dip in quality.
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Oh no, just when I’m catching on! This is an excellent poem. I love it’s quietness
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I don’t think you have to worry too much…I never stray that far from my narrow field of references and I return over and over again.
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Narrow, I disagree with. Thematic perhaps. Nonetheless you have written a marvelous poem, one that captures a mood and places your reader in the scene. I loved it.
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Thank you kindly for the praise!
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Always my pleasure
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These are lines that I find powerful, moving, and poignant…especially the final stanza that seems a shift in mood, time, or thought.
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I like the abrupt mood change occasionally, have to keep people guessing. Thank you for the high praise Miss Heart.
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You are more than welcome, this is a beautiful poem, I enjoyed!
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Thank you!
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Your poem chimes with those who are not natives. I include myself.
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Thank you Course. As do myself.
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A poem that is very expressive, reflective narrative and shows maturity and what impressed me most was a certain gentleness that leaps out of the page, Thank you as always Mr Cake a beautiful poem.
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Thank you for the kind comments.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
DEEP—VERY DEEP! 😀
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Thank you for the rebooted and the flattering remark!
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Yup—deserved it, you do!
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Ah thank you Mr Caswell.
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