
Previous parts of Tempting Fate can be found at Tempting Fate: Part One, Tempting Fate: Part Two, Tempting Fate: Part Three, Tempting Fate: Part Four, Tempting Fate: Part Five and Tempting Fate: Part Six. Due to the festive season parts Eight and Nine will be available on the first Saturday of 2017. As always thanks to drmegsorick.com for her unstinting support.
VIII.
The train left at 4:13, which meant they had exactly 37 minutes to kill. Margot bought two packets of Silk Cut and handed one to Max.
‘Now you can at least smoke your own instead of taking all of mine,’ she said drily.
‘I thought sharing was caring.’
‘Yeah, but it’s meant to be a two way street, darling, not completely all one way traffic.’
They went over to the dirty, beige-coloured cafe and ordered two dirty, beige-coloured coffees. The place was full of tramps in the process of disintegrating before Max’s very eyes and sharp-faced young men, completely immobile and watching all the entrances and exits patiently. They were undoubtedly pimps just waiting to offer sinister charity to the inevitable waif having strayed too far from home.
‘Shall we head towards the platform now, Margot?’ Max asked her. ‘This place gives me the creeps.’
‘We still have…let’s see,’ Margot said as she checked her watch. ‘Another 23 minutes yet. Besides, you haven’t finished your coffee.’
‘Nah, it’s OK. I think it’s re-heated washing up water anyway. I need to get a coke on the way out to get rid of the taste.’
‘I suppose we can wait on the platform. I hope you will be able to sit still on the train. It’s over two hours, you know,’ she teased.
‘Of course. Sitting still is not really a problem for me. I can do anything if I put my mind to it.’
‘Really? Is that so?’ Margot seemed amused at Max’s boasting. ‘Maybe you should put your mind to it more often, then.’
‘Just because you’re my father’s guest doesn’t mean that you can be cheeky to his son. You’re not that much older than me you know. I mean, the way you go on, anyone would think you’re my big sister,’ Max grumbled.
‘Ahh poor baby, did I hurt your feelings? Come on,’ she said, standing. ‘Let’s get to platform 5, then.’
They left the dismal cafe and walked against the tide of disembarked passengers to platform 5. When they had found a place to wait, Margot opened her packet of cigarettes and offered one to Max. They smoked in silence until the train pulled up to the platform.
All the other passengers seemed to be Midlands businessmen ready to read every line of print in their rolled newspapers, either that or sleep. Even the ones traveling with friends or colleagues sat in stony-faced silence.
Max gauged that Margot wasn’t in the mood to talk either, so he contented himself with watching the scenery unroll outside the window as they passed through the North London suburbs. Of course, property close to train-lines always tends to be less than truly desirable, so for a good while all he saw were unkempt back gardens, strewn with broken prams, discarded children toys and rusted kitchen appliances.
As the train left the city behind and entered the countryside, it began to pick up speed. There was something about traveling that always made Max feel sleepy which in turn, made him very aroused. The desire for sleep had been somewhat counteracted by the drug —his blood cells jittered and raced through his ever expanding capillaries. However, the motion, the proximity of Margot (that scent -her scent), the living, shimmering fabric of her skin— all of it combined to make Max uncomfortably aware of his erection.
He didn’t suppose it would do any harm to close his eyes for just a few minutes and let delicious visions of unbridled bliss wash over his tired senses. It wouldn’t hurt at all. In fact, it would be a good thing, a very good thing indeed…
He could picture it all so clearly, the sun unmoving at its zenith above the tranquil, blue water reflecting the cloudless sky. The beach deserted as it would never be in this day and age, on such a perfect afternoon. He has it all to himself. Over to his right, where the cliffs meet the sand, a woman is swimming to shore. Once out of the water, she spots him and hesitates, but then waves at him rather hurriedly and shyly. Despite the tentative nature of the gesture, it seems like she is beckoning to him, the motion was meant to entice, is in fact, an invitation. But before he can get up and follow her, she has already disappeared into one of the many high-rise apartment blocks that nestle in the hills overlooking the sea.
The train came to an abrupt halt, jolting Max back to consciousness.
‘Ahhh, I see you have decided to re-join the land of the living. About time too, we are almost there now, Max. I would say about another fifteen to twenty minutes. That is, if the train ever leaves this benighted shit-hole,’ Margot remarked with a gesture towards the bleak landscape on display.
Max peered through the dirt-smeared windows. She hadn’t exaggerated. Massive chimneys belched out bilious smoke that only partially obscured the derelict Victorian factories and abandoned rusting warehouses. Heavy industry had long since poisoned the earth so that now only the rankest of weeds were surviving and thriving in the brown fields. All manner of refuse had been thrown from the banks of the disused canals into the silted beds below. A few occasional figures, undoubtedly drunks or junkies, all dressed in drab, earth tones or dingy, rainy-day hues, stumbled forlornly across this hopeless environment.
‘Do you know where we are now?’ Max asked.
‘Darling, what gives you the notion that I would have the faintest idea what that place is called? Does anyone know? And even if anyone did, would they care to remember? It just one of those places that the trains always stop at for some bizarre reason, even though there is no station.’
Just then, the train lurched into motion. ‘Finally,’ sighed Margot.
As the train approached Birmingham, slowly, with frequent stops —presumably because of interchanges and increased commuter and freight traffic— it became apparent that it was a city of competing brutalities. A place designed for man’s absence; all distressed concrete and smashed glass. Some joker had thought that Birmingham should emulate L.A’s autopia (under these northern skies!), while another genius had tried to recreate Le Corbusier’s Radiant City on the cheap.
Well, guess what, Max thought, that shit hadn’t worked. It had failed miserably, actually producing the opposite of what was intended, a place that neither shone nor sparkled, in fact cast no light at all. Birmingham The Unradiant City.
‘We are here,’ Margot said, standing up as the train came to a stop at New Street Station.
Good morning, Cake. Good show. I’m still imagining the junkies in Burberry raincoats. I really should’ve written that in!
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I would have gone for historical accuracy. The time of Max and Margot Burberry would still been a luxury brand, though it would be a good line. Maybe in the finished novel you can edit it in
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Oh but time is all wibbly wobbly in Max and Margot’s world. Did the link request appear?
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True, it’s a wibbly wobbly world for the wobbles of Wimbledon Common. No, still no sign. Hmmm.
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All right I’m going to try again right this very minute
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Ok maybe if you change the publication date.
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No it worked this time, finally
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Thank you. Well re reading it I think it has some quality writing. Maybe I can write after all?
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Some? Some? Don’t be ridiculous! You’re a brilliant writer!
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Hmmm Nabokov is better
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Comparison is the thief of joy.
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All too true. OK I am not bad.
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That’s the spirit, Cake… you are better than ‘not bad’ believe me.
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Thank you so much, and you are excellent at prodding me. Which is exactly what I need.
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I am happy to be involved. If I ever become overbearing, you are allowed to tell me to go to hell!
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Not at all, I am naturally lazy and would just think about this stuff instead of writing if you didn’t wake me up now and then
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That is fantastic! I am Lady Gregory to your Yeats. Ok that’s pompous… but you know what I mean!
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I do. I thank you.
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You’re very welcome.
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Thank you.
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Love the description of the London suburbs from the train window. Brings back childhood memories of the trips to Paddington! As for Birmingham … a lost city for so many people from the south and south west. “Brummage, eh? Full of smeg-heads and gits!” I can’t remember who wrote that.
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Well it is the birth of my birth so I felt very uncharitable writing this, especially as the city has undergone a massive re invention. But my memories are mainly of an Unradiant City, which I think is a good description of 80’s Brum. I think I do a good job with bleak surroundings.
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Birmingham has an unmerited “bad” reputation throughout ‘middle class’ Britain, from Brum to Best Scraps Available. By extension, not all Welshmen are Taffies and not all Taffies are thieves. Alas. like Malcolm Lowry, we often live under the shadow of the volcano.
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It is also a city that lacked self confidence. I was deadly serious about it being a city of competing brutalities. Generation of deluded city planners imposed a vision of astounding ugliness, both grandiose and petty and very misguided. Well tear it down and build again. That could be Birminghams motto.
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I was always worried about a Bullring in a major English city. I remember when Aston Villa, West Brom, and Birmingham were all first division. That competitive edge was somehow lost. What a pity. I used to compete in the Midlands sports events out of Birmingham but saw little of the city. Train > event > home.
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Well my Birmingham is more a symbol than an actual place, but then the whole world in Tempting Fate is an hallucination.
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“The whole world … is an hallucination.”Indeed it is. And many a philosophy has been built round this insight.
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And religions as well. I am haunted by this possibility.
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I think the USA will be haunted by it soon. Let’s just hope it’s not the whole western world as we know it.
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Well I think the feeling that everything is all just slightly ersatz haunts our imagination. Sometimes it’s just not that convincing. But maybe I am arguing from my own peculiarity
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In the Charabanc trip (or something similar) Dylan Thomas’s traveling men meet a rugby player in a country pub and the conversation goes like this:
“I played for Llanelli.”
“Liar.”
“I’ve got a cap to prove it.”
“Stolen.”
“I’ve got photos and letters.”
“Forged.”
“I’ve got witnesses to prove it.”
“Bribed.”
When these four words: liar, stolen, forged, bribed dominate our dialogue on what is true or false, then the world finds itself indeed in a sad situation, for we are destroying the very basis of knowledge as we know and accept it. Dylan was poking fun. Alas, the wheel has turned full circle and the new reality is both sad and dangerous.
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The new old reality, we cannot get off the wheel. History is the nightmare from which I am trying to awaken. Still sleeping.
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Birmingham, The Unradient City! Ha, ha – love it! (The city of my youth, by the way, so I think I have the right to laugh!)
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Thank you… it’s my birth place and I spent a part of my childhood and youth growing up there, so maybe I am being a bit unkind. However if you grew up there you know what I mean. Thanks for the comments and glad I made you laugh. I am proud of that, Unradiant City, don’t think Birmingham is going to use it in an ad campaign anytime soon though.
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You never know…!
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Somehow I doubt it. It’s not exactly a compliment, but some joker might think it is.
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Anything to do with tempting and temptation..always catches my eye. Another great, enlightening post Mr. Cake. Thank you😊
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Thank you for your kind comments. Hopefully the novel is progressing well. I can resist anything but temptation.
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mmm. Same here Mr. Cake. I have carved OW’s quote into my shoulder. As an underscore.Thankfully, as I have gotten older…the list of things that tempt me…has gotten much smaller. The ones that are left…are the most insidious, however.
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Very true indeed.
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Mr. Cake, this is splendid. The dialogue between Max and Margot is terrific, and the visual descriptions of the surrounds are perfectly bleak, how marvelous. I can see it all, even the “dirty, beige-coloured” cafe and coffees. Looking forward to what will happen next. ~ Miss Cranes
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Thank you so much Miss Cranes. Max remembers earlier in Tempting Fate that for his mother ‘it is always night and always raining’ and the apple never falls very far from the tree. If there was a massive market for bleak, well I would be a wealthy man by now.
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You’re very welcome Mr. Cake. I know that place well, a favorite spot, ‘it is always night and always raining’. I hope you know that “bleak” was a compliment. Brooding has a certain appeal for me, oh how lovely.
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I love bleak as well, I took it as a compliment, believe you me. I aim for positively Nordic/ Bergman heights of bleakness.
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Very good then, thank you for letting me know. Looking forward to more.
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I am working on Miss Cranes, I am looking forward to your Monday piece as well.
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Thank you. You and me both. It’s rather dark, so I’m always apprehensive to post.
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Dark is good… personally I am hoping its darker than a power cut.
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You paint a good picture of their surroundings. They have a fun relationship- it’s friendly but you get the impression that she’s just sort of tolerating him sometimes. So they have arrived…can’t wait to see what they get up to.
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Well they haven’t arrived at Xanadu just yet, nearly there but not quite. It is a fun relationship but I am not sure that all is as it seems. Thank you for your support.
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Oh, of course it’s not all as it seems…this is you, we’re talking about. 😉
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I will take that as a compliment
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Of course it is! 🙂
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Thank you very much
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🙂 You’re very welcome. Have a great night.
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I will try
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I love the way your writing style has evolved. It’s very descriptive, which is so important; it’s like looking at pictures painted with words. I could even see the colors of the café and the station. Everything was sort of grey, with streaks of dark red where signs and people’s coats were. I don’t know. I just really liked it!
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Thanks C.M. I writing much more frequently lately which is helping I think. Plus I am not over thinking it too much, which helps I think. More writing and less thinking.
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That’s definitely always a good way to go. A lot of times, you start thinking about writing something, and then you ask yourself, Am I really prepared to write this? Do I know enough about the subject? I’ve stopped asking myself that question, and I’ve just started diving into it! 🙂
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Agreed. Thanks for the support C.M, I love it when you come around, you were one of my first commenters and it really helped with my confidence. Happy New Year
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Oh man. Cake! Probably my favourite chapter so far. Utterly enjoyable. I love how everything seemed to have slowed down, all in favour of the story of course.
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Thank you very much… I really must get back to writing this. Two more parts have been written but I haven’t worked on it for months.
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Jupp. Let me be your muse…
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Ideas are always welcome.
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